Catching the signal from one of her friends, Angela brushed her skirt, took a deep breath and walked towards where he was sitting. Her blonde straight hair hung besides her elbows. Her eyes were two long blue rivers. Her lips were pink like a rose. She
wore a wavy black and white skirt that was above her knees and a white tank top. She walked slowly.
“Hi! Angela,” Daniel screamed. He had short brown hair. His eyes were blue like the sky and his lips were red as blood. He was wearing jeans and a black shirt. He smiled as he looked into Angela’s eyes.
“Hi! Daniel,” Angela replied as she smiled back. They both looked at each other as the wind blew making their hair move from one side to the other.
Angela remembered a year ago when she asked a guy to go with her and her friends to the beach. She remembered how happy she was when the guy said yes. Now s
he was about to ask Daniel if he wanted to go with her and her friends to the movies, hoping that he would say yes.
“Would you want to go with my friends and I to the movies tomorrow?” Angela asked.
“Yes! Thanks for inviting me.”
“Okay, see you tomorrow,” she smiled.
“Bye,” he stood up and walked to his class.
She walked towards her friends and started telling them what happened.
Hi Cristina,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you incorperated the flashback. I think it helped tie together the story more. You used a lot of similes and they made the picture in my head more clear. You did a really nice job with using the literary devices. Your story was really good. Great Job!
Taylor
It was awesome how you mentioned what Angela was thinking,feeling and what she looked like.It was cool how you used similes comparing her eyes and lips to rivers and roses. It gave me a picture in my head like I was watching a movie.~[illiana:D]
ReplyDeleteI loved how you included a flashback as one of your literary devices because most blogs I read did not include that. :)
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